Pretend You are a Camera
To master showing instead of telling think of yourself as a camera.
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We have all heard the advice to "show, not tell" in our writing. However, it's so much easier to say, "Jane felt sad about the loss of her child" than to find some way to show that sadness to an audience.
What you need is a change of perspective. You are not a writer privy to the inner thoughts of your characters. You are video camera following her around. You simply describe what you see. Please, don't cheat by saying, "She looked sad" or "She had a sad look in her eyes." What does sadness in the eyes look like? Get rid of all labels for emotions like sad, happy, angry, bitter, worried, etc. Just stick to what a video camera sees. Maybe something like this:
"Jane walks into the room. She pauses as she opens the door. The crib stands at one end of the room. She approaches it. She caresses the wood. She picks up a picture of a baby. She slumps into the antique rocker beside the crib and begins to cry."
This is what the camera would see. I used no emotional labels. I showed what happened, and I let you interpret those actions.
So, if you find that you are telling more than showing, stop writing and start videoing.